Kia ora! I am a Year 7 student in Room 5 at Ahipara School, in the Far North of New Zealand. My teacher is Ms Peters. This is where I share my learning. Please leave a positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.
Kia ora Hunter, ko Ms Peters toku ingoa. Nō te kura o Ahipara ahau. I enjoyed reading your sizzling start. I like the way you could see the improvement between your 'before' and 'after' and how you added more detail and descriptive language. To be better than before (BTB) maybe you could put your writing on a Google slide and add an image to show your Haunted house. Keep up the good effort! Mā te wa.
Kia ora Hunter, ko Ms Peters toku ingoa. Nō te kura o Ahipara ahau.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your sizzling start. I like the way you could see the improvement between your 'before' and 'after' and how you added more detail and descriptive language. To be better than before (BTB) maybe you could put your writing on a Google slide and add an image to show your Haunted house. Keep up the good effort! Mā te wa.